To err is human; to forgive, divine.
—Alexander
Pope
I recently came
across Whittier’s “Forgiveness,” which made me think of personal “forgiveness
experiences.” We all have them: things we’ve forgiven, things we can’t forgive,
hurts that haunt us, people who refuse to forgive us
Forgiveness by John Greenleaf Whittier
My heart was heavy, for its trust had been
Abused, its kindness answered with foul wrong;
So, turning gloomily from my fellow-men,
One summer Sabbath day I strolled among
The green mounds of the village burial-place;
Where, pondering how all human love and hate
Find one sad level; and how, soon or late,
Wronged and wrongdoer, each with meekened face,
And cold hands folded over a still heart,
Pass the green threshold of our common grave,
Whither all footsteps tend, whence none depart,
Awed for myself, and pitying my race,
Our common sorrow, like a mighty wave,
Swept all my pride away, and trembling I forgave!
How often in our lives have we
been hurt and carried that hurt with us, unable or unwilling to let it go? Holding
onto anger and resentment can cause us extreme emotional stress, and often, we
suffer more than the people who have hurt us. Such feelings can damage us
emotionally and spiritually, but getting past them, releasing anger,
resentment, and bitterness—forgiving—can lead us to inner peace. We all need to
“forgive and forget” (though forgetting is sometimes harder than forgiving); and
we all need to move forward, to let the past go. This can happen when we
forgive. That said, I know how challenging true forgiveness can be, but
forgiving (when we’re able to manage it) can be very freeing. Writing, too, can
be freeing. This week, let’s use poetry to work toward resolving some
forgiveness issues.
Suggestions:
Write a poem about someone
you’ve forgiven or someone you haven’t been able to forgive.
Write a poem about something
for which you need to be forgiven.
Write a poem about something
for which you’ve forgiven or not forgiven yourself.
Write a poem about something you’ve forgiven but can’t
forget.
Write a poem about a time in which you “let go” of
something (or someone) through forgiveness.
Write a poem about someone who refuses to forgive you.
Tips:
1. This prompt lends itself to a narrative poem (a poem in
which you tell a story).
2. Be careful not to over-tell; don’t include too many
details; watch out for overuse of adjectives; and be especially wary of overstating
sentiment and emotion. Focus on the elements of your story that readers will
relate to (the details may be different, but the response you want to evoke is,
“Yes, I know that feeling”).
3. Remember that your poem should contain no unnecessary
words, no superfluous phrases, and no explanations. Center on strong images.
4. Use sounds (alliteration, assonance, internal rhymes)
to help tell your story.
5. Try writing your narrative poem in the third person and,
when you’ve completed it, change to the first person. Which version is better?
Examples:
Hooray! Regular prompt posts are back! And this one is a cracking one!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jamie!
Delete(Love that English "cracking.")
Defluxit amor etiam si infinitum dicitur...
ReplyDeleteE' svanito in qualche triste vento
invernale, il nostro amore che pure
chiamammo infinito; in me lasciò
ferro dolce di rimpianti, in te,
forse , solo un ricordo da non
dimenticare. E ancora ricordo
tutte le certezze, adesso amare.
Vanished in some sad winter wind
our love that even we called infinite;
it left soft iron regrets in me, in you,
perhaps,just a memory not to be forget.
And I still remember certainties,
so bitter nowadays.
Adele, I don't know if this translation is understandable or if there are "gross" mistakes; feel free to not post it!
Ciao
Jago, I just read this on your blog:
Deletehttp://ottantanovenuvole.blogspot.com/2010/10/alcudio-una-poesia-alcuni-frammenti.html
Your language in the translation is brilliant, though I have to admit that I don't know the original language well enough, which translates to this: I love your translation regardless of the original!
Thanks so much for posting this!
I wish I could read the original properly, though my linguistics background helped a bit. This is a lovely interpretation of the prompt.
DeleteJago, this is brilliant! You're wonderful!
DeleteYour lovely prompt made me attempt something that's been burbling around in my brain for some time: http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com/2013/05/05/spenserian-stanza/
ReplyDeleteWonderful, Vivinfrance! You've chosen a little-used form to articulate a powerful life message. thanks for sharing with us.
DeleteThanks so much for sharing. I love that you've written a Spenserian sonnet (not the easiest sonnet form) to reflect on a relationship and the quality of forgiveness. Beautifully written (and your blog is beautifully designed).
DeleteFor readers not familiar with Spenserian Sonnet form:
Spenserian stanza, verse form that consists of eight iambic pentameter lines followed by a ninth line of six iambic feet (an alexandrine); the rhyme scheme is ababbcbcc. The first eight lines produce an effect of formal unity, while the hexameter completes the thought of the stanza. Invented by Edmund Spenser for his poem The Faerie Queene (1590–1609), the Spenserian stanza has origins in the Old French ballade (eight-line stanzas, rhyming ababbcbc), the Italian ottava rima (eight iambic pentameter lines with a rhyme scheme of abababcc), and the stanza form used by Chaucer in his “Monk’s Tale” (eight lines rhyming ... (100 of 148 words)
Basil, don't you dare disappear now that Poetry Month is over!
ReplyDeleteYou MUST give us a poem or two from time to time. (Even if you repeat one of the older ones.)
Okay, I'm adding my ditto too. (I hope you'll keep posting poems, Basil.)
DeleteJamie and Adele,
ReplyDeleteHow can I resist?
I will, I will.
Thank you both!
Basil
Thank you Rich, as well.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate your words.
Best,
Basil
- MH -
ReplyDeleteshe
was just a girl
'splaying rubiauburn caracole
in dingy sunlight
as hungry danced 'round
hungry for something
she was just a girl
a daughter-mother
born
to skill & scullery
as the others danced
merry into dingy sunlight
hungry for something
she
& jessedressy
she was just a girl
only
the strains of music assuaged,
like an unfamiliar bosom's
familiar melody,
to the wireless
or of the paucitous street
marconi 'n cheese
never cheesy enough
she was just a girl
whirls, & whirled
of pirates & barons
abandoned
like a vested, barren jessedressy
to
citizenbest
restive for something
beyond vacancy
& vacated friends,
now coveted
she was just a girl
before
me,
of violate pianokey smudge:
what size? critisize,
home to eyes
streaked like windows
in her dingy sunlight
born to moaning,
when our cord was cut
she cried
plentimental
mother
is the necessity of invention
she was just a girl
two centenaries
rubiauburn caracole
too soon silvered
to bleach white
like marrowless bones
fed on resentaplenty...
wilting silk flowers
she
was just a girl
she was just a girl
H.e.m./O’H’H.
4.19.MMix
(For F)
HaroHalola,
DeleteThanks so much for sharing your poem. The inventive word combinations and rhythms are very striking!
Brilliant! The rhythms are amazing!
DeleteForgiveness
ReplyDeleteYour bitter tears
and
shaking, unsteady voice
fill my heart
with your pain
Only the medicine
of prayer
eases the aching
I willingly
listen to your
complaints
accept your abuse
Were I near
I'd hold your hand
brush your hair
and sit by
your side all day
I can't stop weeping
The tears we shed for those whom we love, and in those tears forgiveness ...
DeleteThe emotional center of this poem is profoundly universal—deceptively simple in your uncomplicated and accessible style. Many of us weep with you!
I guess because this is such an emotional situation, and writing about it is also so emotional, your comment is valued and appreciated, and so needed.
DeleteSo touching and sad, Risa! This is what forgiveness is about. I hope writing the poem brought you some comfort.
DeleteHello Adele & Jamie - I am privileged to be a participant/contributor to the site's current prompt...pleased & humbled by your assessment of my work. As Sunday is Mother's Day, the piece is a fitting homage; and as I seemingly am the proverbial newly betrothed down the aisle, am I permitted to offer other pieces germane?
ReplyDeleteI look forward to reading & responding-to others' proffers here; again, thank you for the opportunity to share poetry with poets.
Hello HaroHalola,
DeleteI'm delighted to "meet" you here on the blog, and, yes, please post again. Your poems and comments are most welcome!
Ms. Adele - Thank you, a pleasure, I am sure; I will continue to strive here to literary worthiness through both my work & comments/crits. for others'.
ReplyDeleteYour interest in the blog and your inputs are much appreciated!
DeleteHello Risa - "...the medicine of prayer," indeed; your poem brings me closer to the "there," to the easing of the aching.
ReplyDeleteToday is May 9, 2013 and the prompting theme is FORGIVENESS
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I don't know where she bought it and when
(a plastic baby, of no name, neutral gender,
with painted blue eyes, low tech, no voice),
yet, always impeccably dressed in sweaters
she knitted for it — a new one every year.
On my vacation trips back from America
she always seated it on the corner chair
right next to the convertible couch
where I spent my guest nights back home,
turning my head in the mornings
to avoid its stare and the guilt it was designed
to cause. Ultimately, mother stopped conversations
about real children from me
and settled for her plastic grand kid.
I only hope she forgave me.
Hooray and THANK YOU, Basil for continuing to share with us!
DeleteI'm sure she loved you with the kind of maternal love that never needs to forgive. A beautiful poem!
So glad to see a new poem from you, Basil! And I echo Jamie's comment, which is so perceptively stated.
DeleteThanks, as always, for sharing!
Basil - Perhaps I didn't effectively click "Publish" with my comment; so reiterating, I found this surreal, well-constructed, poignantly-pained & expressive; you are "forgiven." Thank you.
ReplyDeleteI fell in love with the lines written by John Greenleaf Whittier!! amazing !! good job!!
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