tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post7955791156103109642..comments2024-01-18T05:29:43.265-05:00Comments on The Music In It: Adele Kenny's Poetry Blog: Prompt #192 – In, Above, Beyond: Prepositional Phrases in PoetryADELE KENNYhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09556261298519747516noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-34115353835286086592014-07-24T09:28:11.438-04:002014-07-24T09:28:11.438-04:00Thanks so much for your comment, poem, and kind wo...Thanks so much for your comment, poem, and kind words, Danny. <br /><br />I'm so glad to know that some of the prompts have been helpful. Please feel free to post any time! There's always a sense of fun and mutual purpose when we share our poems, so please, share with us again!ADELE KENNYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09556261298519747516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-42268795246129746902014-07-23T15:15:28.482-04:002014-07-23T15:15:28.482-04:00I rarely post here, Adele, but I appreciate your p...I rarely post here, Adele, but I appreciate your prompts very much. I've written several "keepers" that were prompted by you. Thank you!<br /><br />Here is a poem that seems to fit this prompt. Even though it was written a while ago and is already pupblished (Shadow Road Quarterly), I hope you're OK with me posting it here - just for the fun of sharing poetry.<br /><br />This Is the Knowing <br /><br />Cheeks flush pomegranate red<br />upon embers - this is the knowing<br />that eventually everything ends badly.<br />Still, there’s a welcoming of the wet<br />taste of raspberry against my tongue.<br /><br />Fingers lace saltwater gray<br />between damp - this is the knowing<br />that eventually everything turns tepid.<br />Still, there’s an easy sway to the talk<br />on the scaly brown boardwalk.<br /><br />Lungs inhale thick sticky black<br />against rot - this is the knowing<br />that eventually everything is a suffocation.<br />Still, there’s a strange steady rhythm<br />to this sharing a blanket each night.<br /><br />Minds race cold paisley and blue<br />upon ice - this is the knowing<br />that eventually everything grows gone.<br />Still, there’s unlocking my eyes in the dark<br />and seeing the absence of being unknown.<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-57027085714155671672014-07-23T09:07:21.870-04:002014-07-23T09:07:21.870-04:00Hi Mariam, so nice to meet you here on the blog. I...Hi Mariam, so nice to meet you here on the blog. I'm happy to know that you found the prompt helpful. Hope you'll be a frequent visitor!ADELE KENNYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09556261298519747516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-70295551080600128702014-07-22T18:27:49.961-04:002014-07-22T18:27:49.961-04:00Hi Adele! super helpful blog post, just came acros...Hi Adele! super helpful blog post, just came across your blog :)<br />and a really cool idea for playing around with structure and poetry!Mariamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15815135306658425632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-41054098923091047272014-07-22T10:26:50.922-04:002014-07-22T10:26:50.922-04:00Hi Kathy,
Thanks so much for sharing your Ronka! ...Hi Kathy,<br /><br />Thanks so much for sharing your Ronka! Love it!ADELE KENNYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09556261298519747516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-47807080322448966412014-07-21T17:44:43.330-04:002014-07-21T17:44:43.330-04:00Hi Adele, thanks for another great idea! I've ...Hi Adele, thanks for another great idea! I've given it a try. Hope you like it.<br /><br />Kathy Shaw<br /><br />FOR LOVE<br /><br />Out of the usual place,<br />with the man in the moon<br />(over the clouds, into the stars),<br />into a celestial experience —<br />shall we say, “This is for love?”<br />Kathy Shawnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-19952287428212835862014-07-20T12:03:18.767-04:002014-07-20T12:03:18.767-04:00Thanks, Jamie! Great way to put it: "those pe...Thanks, Jamie! Great way to put it: "those pesky prepositional phrases."ADELE KENNYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09556261298519747516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-68364946350942025352014-07-20T12:01:36.560-04:002014-07-20T12:01:36.560-04:00I would think you might be tired of hearing me cau...I would think you might be tired of hearing me caution against too many prepositional phrases, Basil! Only kidding, of course, and I'm glad to know that the "guidance" has been useful to you. <br /><br />Thanks for sharing the before and the after with us—it provides a wonderful example of what can be done during editing.ADELE KENNYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09556261298519747516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-86557074565601480222014-07-20T08:28:34.811-04:002014-07-20T08:28:34.811-04:00Very interesting, Basil, to see how a poem can cha...Very interesting, Basil, to see how a poem can change through a process of effective editing. Thanks for sharing with us.<br />Jamie Morrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-72418545624808036112014-07-20T08:27:21.667-04:002014-07-20T08:27:21.667-04:00Great exercise, Adele, for becoming more aware of ...Great exercise, Adele, for becoming more aware of those pesky prepositional phrases! I especially like the "practical application" part.Jamie Morrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6272430209314356497.post-81484490243687870192014-07-19T23:50:13.575-04:002014-07-19T23:50:13.575-04:00There are many poetry things I have learnt from yo...There are many poetry things I have learnt from you, Adele. The elimination of unnecessary prepositional phrases is one of the most impactful suggestions.<br /><br />The list of phrases you give in this post is extremely useful. They should serve as radar screens in my future writing.<br /><br />Below is an example of a "before and after" poem.<br /><br /><br />SEASCAPE<br /><br />As the evening approached<br />the sandy beach<br />we lied down, tired,<br />together.<br /><br />The ocean in a huge swell<br />bundled for me shells, as big <br />as your eyes, along <br />with its white foam.<br /><br />We gazed at the sun that was fading,<br />we put on our shoes,<br />and buttoned our coats <br />to return to the room<br /><br /><br /><br />FALL BEACH AT DUSK<br /><br />We lied down on the sand<br />and the ocean gifted me sea-shells <br /><br />the shape of your eyes on its<br />white foam. We gazed at the sunset,<br /><br />put on our shoes, and buttoned our coats<br />for the walk back to the room.<br /><br />Basil RouskasBasilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09663203702515912643noreply@blogger.com